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[Llywela]

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[Yosso]

Hi!

Well I've just read the first two episodes of SS. First thoughts? interesting beginning. I like how you've taken a moment, very insignificant in Buffy and completely blown it up and turned it into something huge. Firstly on Xakiel (love the name by the way)? gives off a very Angel-esque vibe, to me at least - quite dark, tortured and mysterious, but at the same time not? he doesn't appear as closed as Angel.

Just a slight nitpick, "each other" is two words, in every instance it was mentioned it was written as though it was one and in all honesty, your previously's take forever, the whole point of them is to get the basic crucial information and to get straight to the point, I do avoid them but then I find it difficult to find the start of the episode, anyway it's not a big deal .

And Rack? look what you've done with the guy, you've given him a heart! I like how you've used Rack and given him more layers, he's not just creepy dealer guy, he has a daughter. I'm interested to know the deal between Rack, Charlie and this protection they need. With Charlie's dreams, I'm guessing she's the daughter and Sephy's her mother or something? There's definitely a juicy history there though.

Cate? Cate, Cate, Cate. I'm loving her already and I can completely see why you cast Amanda Seyfried to play her (from her role in Mean Girls), she's cute and a little dim witted, I'm thinking she'll be interesting. I like the slow introduction into the show, you appear to be slowly trickling in the introduction to characters instead of slamming them all into the first episode, which is what most writers seem to do.

You've done a good job so far, well done .

[Lex]

Hi!

Well I've just read the first two episodes of SS. First thoughts? interesting beginning. I like how you've taken a moment, very insignificant in Buffy and completely blown it up and turned it into something huge. Firstly on Xakiel (love the name by the way)? gives off a very Angel-esque vibe, to me at least - quite dark, tortured and mysterious, but at the same time not? he doesn't appear as closed as Angel.

Just a slight nitpick, "each other" is two words, in every instance it was mentioned it was written as though it was one and in all honesty, your previously's take forever, the whole point of them is to get the basic crucial information and to get straight to the point, I do avoid them but then I find it difficult to find the start of the episode, anyway it's not a big deal .

And Rack? look what you've done with the guy, you've given him a heart! I like how you've used Rack and given him more layers, he's not just creepy dealer guy, he has a daughter. I'm interested to know the deal between Rack, Charlie and this protection they need. With Charlie's dreams, I'm guessing she's the daughter and Sephy's her mother or something? There's definitely a juicy history there though.

Cate? Cate, Cate, Cate. I'm loving her already and I can completely see why you cast Amanda Seyfried to play her (from her role in Mean Girls), she's cute and a little dim witted, I'm thinking she'll be interesting. I like the slow introduction into the show, you appear to be slowly trickling in the introduction to characters instead of slamming them all into the first episode, which is what most writers seem to do.

You've done a good job so far, well done .

Firstly, thanks so much for reading!

In response to your feedback:

So pleased you love Xakiel's name. I don't know where it came from but I knew I wanted to make it up and it just came to me! Haha!

In regards to the word "eachother" thanks so much i'll be sure to remember that and edit. It doesn't come up for some reason in my MS Word?! Weird! Plus the earlier episodes don't have any editors properly, Alex just scanned them to check. But I will amend so thank you! Also about my "previously ons", they almost completely disappear in Season 2, or at least they're much shorter. I know what you mean, the 1.02 one is immensely long, but the others aren't

Pleased you're intrigued by the dreams and you like the way I am introducing the characters. With Cate, and Toole who you will meet soon, it wouldn't have worked to have them all meet in the first episode, it wouldn't have worked and would have been mega forced!

Pleased you're enjoying it thought! It means a lot that i'm getting more readers!

Just so you know I will be posting my Index thread sometime next week, along with the rest of the episodes. Just takes some time to get everything online with the forum change-over!

[Dark Ages]

Lex, all I have to say is OH MY GOD!

Shadow Stalker is such a great fan – fic, I read it and it kind of caught me off guard. To be honest when I first heard of SS I thought it would be lame. But I was 100% wrong. GREAT! BRAVO! I love how you took that one dragon and turned it into a storyline with characters. I would have never thought of that but you did. I love the characters especially Cate. She is so freakin funny I laugh at everything that comes from her mouth. I also like how you gave Rack a back story with his daughter and such. I have to say two thumbs up for SS. It’s very exciting to read, looks like you found your self a new fan. I will be reading more, cant wait.

P.S. Keep up the good work

- Kevin

[Lex]

Lex, all I have to say is OH MY GOD!

Shadow Stalker is such a great fan ? fic, I read it and it kind of caught me off guard. To be honest when I first hear of SS I thought it would be lame. But I was 100% wrong. GREAT! BRAVO! I love how you took that one dragon and turned it into a storyline with characters. I would have never thought of that but you did. I love the characters especially Cate. She is so freakin funny I laugh at everything that comes from her mouth. I also like how you gave Rack a back story with his daughter and such. I have to say two thumbs up for SS. It's very exciting to read, looks like you found your self a new fan. I will be reading more, cant wait.

P.S. Keep up the good work

- Kevin

Thanks so much for reading Kevin! I'm so pleased.

In all honesty, the premise when you explain it does sound lame! But all I ask of people is that they give the series a chance and read 1.01

As it can be seen in your case it's so worth it, which is so amazing to me as the creator/writer.

Glad you're loving Cate and Rack/Charlie, but everything is soon to change i'm sure! Look forward to hearing your future thoughts!! Thanks again!

[Alex]

Oo, 3.04 is fantastic Lex, I loved Macie

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Can't believe she died !

and the twist at the end was OMGz worthy. I am a little shady with my memories of one of those characters so I shall have to go back and read some earlier episodes methinks, but I am excited about the new characters and how they're going to screw things up Also loved the bold font of DOOM.

Excellent work as always mister!

[Lex]

Oo, 3.04 is fantastic Lex, I loved Macie

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Can't believe she died !

and the twist at the end was OMGz worthy. I am a little shady with my memories of one of those characters so I shall have to go back and read some earlier episodes methinks, but I am excited about the new characters and how they're going to screw things up Also loved the bold font of DOOM.

Excellent work as always mister!

Ah yes Macie...

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Bit of a one hit wonder i'm afraid. But I loved her too. She was a clever character to show the ordinary world's gradual awareness of the demon world!

In regards to...

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Brogan and Kaia. Kaia has never been in SS before and is a new character but obviously Brogan has. He featured in 1.11 and 1.15 in flashbacks Xak was having to when he lived in Glory's dimension. You don't actually need to know anything about him other than that he was a human trying to help Xak by feeding him and letting him know about what was going on in the outside world. That's it...3.05 will explain everything and even include those Season 1 flashbacks

So glad you loved though Alexos, and thanks for feedback! Makes a change to see some!

P.S Bold font of doom is ace.

[Wiccan Rosenberg]

Okay, I found this worthy to post as my first one on the (new) forums. I still have to upload things.. er.. anyway, moving on!

"3.05 - When the Walls Bled" took time coming out, but that made it better in the end! I absolutely loved this episode. There were honestly only a few little nitpicky things that I didn't like, but that's just me being hateful. :P

Storyline:
I liked the plot for it, giving us a real glimpse into Xakiel's past that we've all been on the edge of our seats to hear. It tied the past and the present together nicely, instead of jumping backwards and forwards constantly like a lot of shows do. That gets on my nerves, so I'm glad that this episode didn't go down that route.

I was sad when the elders died, and especially when Smith was the one left standing. :\ Bastard. Ursula cracks me up, and I'm not even really sure why. I think she has a pure heart, wanting to guide the kids and not hide anything from them. She still is with them, too, which is good.

The only question I have that's itching at me now is .. who tf is Xak's real mother? :[

Ea Brogan
Goodie. :x I love him. I think he's going to be a great addition to the cast, and Jensen as his PB makes it hotter. He's a good guy, the only bad thing about him is where he's fallen for Kaia. I'll get onto that, later.

He's stayed Xak's best friend all these years, he was only protecting him in the battle.. Squee, Xak has a best friend again! :]

Kaia Thorn
Gag me. I'm sorry, but she's selfish. It seems she's really willing to do anything to get back with Xak, even ruin his new life. Xak had no decision in becoming the Shadow Stalker, losing his memories, his feelings, etc. Kaia is still driven by being with him, and .. gag me.

I just don't like her. :\ I guess I was expecting more of an Addison Montgomery-Shepard, but got a different girl. Bah. Like I said earlier, it's me, though.

Trafford & Elise / Shelter & Constance
Oooh. Sexy healers, and a girl who can blend in. :P I like Trafford, and I have a soft spot for Elise. I feel bad for them because of Smith, and I kind of wish Trafford could have just punched him -- but then again, this is a good show, not a overdramatic soap opera. :P Shelter was interesting, it gave us another character who I want to know more of a backstory for. As for Constance, I like her, I just wasn't immediately drawn to her. Just me being nitpicky with so many fresh characters, though.

Suspiria & Kalipso
Omg, thank you for naming the other two Gods. Yes, I'm extremely weird, but by god I wanted them named. xD It bothered me, but they're pretty neat.. I want to know more about them, and especially the arguement, but I guess we might find out in the next episode? (since it is named after one. )

Dante/Lance
is hot. (so sue me, I have to mention it. :])

[Lex]

Hey Jared! So glad you joined! I'm gonna answer in spoiler tags for those who have not read yet

Spoiler:

Storyline:
I liked the plot for it, giving us a real glimpse into Xakiel's past that we've all been on the edge of our seats to hear. It tied the past and the present together nicely, instead of jumping backwards and forwards constantly like a lot of shows do. That gets on my nerves, so I'm glad that this episode didn't go down that route.

Thanks, it was SUCH a hard episode to write considering the immense number of things that needs to be addressed in it, so i'm pleased you feel it worked.

I was sad when the elders died, and especially when Smith was the one left standing. :\ Bastard. Ursula cracks me up, and I'm not even really sure why. I think she has a pure heart, wanting to guide the kids and not hide anything from them. She still is with them, too, which is good.

I love Ursula, she's such a funny little woman and has much to offer the series. As to Smith, yes he is a bastard haha, and the elders had to die because I couldn't get ALL these characters into the series and it was a real turning point for all the syndicate. However they will pop up again...

The only question I have that's itching at me now is .. who tf is Xak's real mother? :[

Xak's mother will be revealed, but I will not say who. Also don't forget there's an issue on who is dad is as well "in life, his father was a good man"...?

Ea Brogan
Goodie. :x I love him. I think he's going to be a great addition to the cast, and Jensen as his PB makes it hotter. He's a good guy, the only bad thing about him is where he's fallen for Kaia. I'll get onto that, later.

He's stayed Xak's best friend all these years, he was only protecting him in the battle.. Squee, Xak has a best friend again! :]

Yes! Xak has a bessie mate again, but I'm trying to be really careful in making sure he does not replace Toole. They're very different people. Yes I know he's fallen for Kaia and it is bad...again it's all gonna work up to be something big...

Kaia Thorn
Gag me. I'm sorry, but she's selfish. It seems she's really willing to do anything to get back with Xak, even ruin his new life. Xak had no decision in becoming the Shadow Stalker, losing his memories, his feelings, etc. Kaia is still driven by being with him, and .. gag me.

I just don't like her. :\ I guess I was expecting more of an Addison Montgomery-Shepard, but got a different girl. Bah. Like I said earlier, it's me, though.

HAHA Addison. I never drew that comparison but interesting! She is selfish, but she also had to watch her husband move on when he was the love of her life. Kaia's selfishness will be poignant to the series and most definitely Charlie and Xak's relationship.

Trafford & Elise / Shelter & Constance
Oooh. Sexy healers, and a girl who can blend in. :P I like Trafford, and I have a soft spot for Elise. I feel bad for them because of Smith, and I kind of wish Trafford could have just punched him -- but then again, this is a good show, not a overdramatic soap opera. :P Shelter was interesting, it gave us another character who I want to know more of a backstory for. As for Constance, I like her, I just wasn't immediately drawn to her. Just me being nitpicky with so many fresh characters, though.

Constance is a bit of a mystery - i'm at the moment in between about where to go with her in all honesty but she has good potential at the moment.

In regards to Trafford, I was VERY close to writing a punch scene actually, but I didn't want it to be too dramatic so I cut it - well observed and pointed out!

Shelter is a mystery and is VERY key. Nuff said, innit.

Suspiria & Kalipso
Omg, thank you for naming the other two Gods. Yes, I'm extremely weird, but by god I wanted them named. xD It bothered me, but they're pretty neat.. I want to know more about them, and especially the arguement, but I guess we might find out in the next episode? (since it is named after one. )

Yessums. Gotta name DEM GODS! Although Kalipso is named in the title of 3.06 she does not appear but they both will appear in future episodes as LOTS of stuff is unknown about them!

Dante/Lance
is hot. (so sue me, I have to mention it. :])[/QUOTE]

HAHA they weren't even in the episode...but if you like Dance then you'll like 3.06...which by the way is in Act 3 and should be out fairly soooon! I reckon early December. It's a big episode, got a death in it and a blast from the past!

Thanks again Jared for some ace feedback! I really appreciate some words from the readers!

[Wiccan Rosenberg]

Spoiler tags .. Oh, the convenience.

Spoiler:

One thing about Kaia before I get to what I reposted for: bah. :[ If she screws up Xak/Charlie before it can recover more, then I will stab her. >:[ Somehow. I'll make it work. :]

Echidna
ALI LARTER. Hot. Sexy. .. Monster-y. Either way, she can do the role, and I'm actually excited to see where this is going. One of the key elements that wrapped me in at the beginning was the use of the Greeks, sicne I've always loved mythology, and especially around those.

I'm interested to see how she's going to play out in the series. We had Hermes, who .. died. Rofl. And the Fates, who also died. Sephy.. miss her. Hecate's gone, too. Hm. Gods usually mean something big, so. Bring it on. :]

As for 3.06.. Yes. I can't wait.

[Lex]

Answers in spoiler tags once again

Spoiler tags .. Oh, the convenience.

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One thing about Kaia before I get to what I reposted for: bah. :[ If she screws up Xak/Charlie before it can recover more, then I will stab her. >:[ Somehow. I'll make it work. :]

She's definitely gonna cause some drama between them, in particular 3.06 and 3.07, and it's funny what you said is close along the lines of what Charlie says to Cate in 3.06, so keep your eyes on that one!

Echidna
ALI LARTER. Hot. Sexy. .. Monster-y. Either way, she can do the role, and I'm actually excited to see where this is going. One of the key elements that wrapped me in at the beginning was the use of the Greeks, sicne I've always loved mythology, and especially around those.

I'm interested to see how she's going to play out in the series. We had Hermes, who .. died. Rofl. And the Fates, who also died. Sephy.. miss her. Hecate's gone, too. Hm. Gods usually mean something big, so. Bring it on. :]

Season Three is definitely more of a focus on Sin and her domination of the world/causing an apocalypse BUT Seasons 4/5/6 are heavily Greek oriented and going back to the basics. Sephy will be in Season 3 and her and Echidna will be working well together, but Echidna becomes ESSENTIAL in a future project...and I mean close future...and not in SS. cough. Don't want to give the game away...but yeah, it'll become clear soon

As for 3.06.. Yes. I can't wait.

[Wiccan Rosenberg]

Yay! I love review time. :] Almost as much as I love reading time! I believe I'm going to murder the spoilertag one more time, but only because of the length.

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In General
3.06 - The Kalipso Syndicate was possibly one of my favorites, though I'm not exactly sure that I can pinpoint why! So many happy things happened in this episode that it's hard to just choose one point and stick with it. First off, I've got to start out by saying haha @ Kaia. :V I'm still not liking her that much. I can see the rivalry between her and Charlie sparking and it doesn't look like it's going to be a very friendly battle, honestly.

Charlie/Xak/Kaia
A love triangle that will be interesting to read, especially with Echidna ready to whoop up on Kaia. [YAY, ;D] I'm not sure how this one is going to play out, but like I said earlier, the rivalry between Charlie and Kaia seems like it'll be a very entertaining/edge-of-your-seat read. Or maybe I'm just crazy. :P Kaia is still coming off as incredibly selfish to me, but it's probably just because of my bias towards her. [Y'know, I'm over here proudly sporting my GO CHARLIE banner!] Charlie looks like she trusts Xak, which is a good thing. I'm trying to not be overly cynical, so I'm reaaaally hoping that Xak is going to be a smart guy. [yes, I went there!] But, like Lance said, he's sold his soul for Charlie and he seems to know when he has a good thing. And for Kaia.. You might always love your first, but just because it's there doesn't mean it's right. [btw, how unfair is it of her to put poor Xaky on the spot like that? She makes me want to hit a ho.]

Cate & Trafford
Well, to start off with, Cate. Oh, how I love thee. I'm overly curious as to what was in that wonderful little wooden box of joys, but I'm doubting her new clique-ish and glowing personality is because she found a certain libido-upper stashed away in there. So what's up with her? Charlie should be able to recognize that something isn't right. Cate went from "yeah, okay, wait, who?" to practically bouncing hyper-ly off the walls. I loved the Little Mermaid reference, though. Sea witch. I've had to hold that one back because I actually like Ursula! Trafford, now.. I like him, still! I don't think he needs to write off his sister's feelings, though. I mean, I know he isn't completely brushing them off, I just don't think he's considering them enough to watch out? Even if we the reader don't see something wrong, that's usually leighway [sorry, I probably completely mutilated that spelling] for the writer to slip one up on us. Hopefully it's nothing.

Elise and Constance
Since I was just speaking of Elise, I'll talk about her first. I'm hoping that her feeling something bad around Cate and Lance is nothing.. maybe just a little of something lingering behind [from Hecate for Cate, maybe the Hell Dimension/prison for Lance.. or maybe Sin has planted something in Lance? Rofl, look at me going all Twilight Zone with my guessing.] I don't think she's completely wrong. I want her hearing to be fixed, though. :[ It's just sad because I'm pretty sure no one else can understand her, so she has to use Trafford as a speaking device? Constance, on the other hand.. I like her! :] She practically has been the guardian angel of the group, and I almost had to hit Dante when he basically just brushed off her power. Let's see you go invisible and kick ass, Dante! D: Not happening, methinks.

Ea and Ursula
I don't have too much to say about them, but I did love Brogan's mocking of Sin whenever he shot her. I know he isn't going to replace Toole, so I'm not scared of that because I think you'll be able to handle the friendship in a completely new light, which is something that some writer's have a problem with. Brogan kicks ass and takes names, and he's pretty much my sexy hero. :] Ursula is basically turning out to be lovely. My feelings haven't really changed for her since the last episode, she cares deeply and protectively for her Syndicate, and those feelings have shown to stay the same even with the separation from them [meaning Xak]. She's an understanding woman.. She reminds me of my Grandma! Except pretty much more kickass. I mean, my Granny couldn't exactly lead a whole team of badass. :P Pretty close, though.

Shelter and Cain / Sin
Shelter is still a mystery. I'm having a hard time believing she's an actual mute, though. I don't think it was stated she was, just that she hasn't found the need to speak, yet. I think we have to learn more about her past, and when we do, it'll be ground-breaking. She's important like the rest of the team, and the fact that she's quiet usually means something big, too. I don't think I'm overanalyzing it, though that is a possibility. Either way, I know she'll prove to be more than I thought. With Cain and Sin.. I actually felt bad that he died. :[ It was sad. I was actually expecting more of a sneaky death, maybe that Xak and Brogan would save him, he'd understand that they weren't the bad guys, and they'd go to save him.. only to have him die some other way at the very end. But I liked his death, too. Sin really is sadistic and I just want her dead. :[ She's psycho-crazy, for serious, ya'll. But in all seriousness, her taking it to the law is pretty messed up.. I think she'll be even more pissed when she finds out that Ursula had it covered up. Maybe? I'm not sure. I'm just waiting for her next attack..

Lance/Dante/Sofia
Are. You. Kidding. Me. :[ This is unfair. I liked Sofia's character a LOT back in the earlier times, and now I'm having to hate her. Well, not specifically, but you know. :P This'll be another interesting love triangle, and for me specifically, one that'll be right up there with Charlie & Kaia's rivalry for Xak. [Of course, I'm just nerdy like that. I'm sporting my TEAM LANCE shirt, now. :x] Lance blushes a lot, but Dante gives him a pretty good reason too. I'm just not sure how it's going to work.. Lance wasn't sure about Dante not too long ago, and now he's fighting off what could be feelings, or at least he's hiding it. Sofia actually had a place with Dante and pretty much wants it back from the way I read it. The question is, what will Dante do? Come on, Lance, step it up. D:!

Black & Sephy
Not too much to say about them. I miss little ole Persephone. I do wonder where she's gotten off to.. though something tells me that it isn't good, given the situation of them avoiding the topic. And about Black.. It's always fun to learn about semi-Big Bads. I'm sure it'll turn out a more interesting read than I'm thinking! [which is in a good way!]

:] Yet again, yay for spoilertags.

[cliomiao]

OMG I LOVE IT!!! I only discovered Shadow stalker like a moth ago and I've already read it all... One day i was sick and i stayed at home and did nothing apart from reading it (and eating)....

Spoiler:

I love Dante/Lance.... But I also love Sofia (though the way she survived doesn't convince me... It looks a bit forced)...
Anyway, from what you said I understood that Echidna is probably going to be in Sirens... When is this spin off coming out? You said it would come out when SS was over, but then you said that you're going to go on until season six with SS.... I can't wait that long!!!! I even hate waiting for a new episode everytime... Stop having a life and just write!!! LOL

[Lex]

WOW JARED! Feedback much! Ok answers in your own spoilertag in bold!

Yay! I love review time. :] Almost as much as I love reading time! I believe I'm going to murder the spoilertag one more time, but only because of the length.

Spoiler:

In General
3.06 - The Kalipso Syndicate was possibly one of my favorites, though I'm not exactly sure that I can pinpoint why! So many happy things happened in this episode that it's hard to just choose one point and stick with it. First off, I've got to start out by saying haha @ Kaia. :V I'm still not liking her that much. I can see the rivalry between her and Charlie sparking and it doesn't look like it's going to be a very friendly battle, honestly.

So pleased you enjoyed it! I was slightly worried that I wouldn't be able to cover everything I wanted to but I did! I know characters like Elise, Shelter and Echidna aren't getting enough show-time at the moment but there's more pressing stuff at the moment and I have stuff planned for them in the future.

Just bear in mind with Kaia that she's had to put up with a lot. She watched her husband get another woman pregnant and fall in love with a new life - I'm writing her at the moment in the way I would react. I think it's just she doesn't sit idley by and not cause a fuss. I wouldn't let anyone stamp on my heart like that, whether it was unintentional or not, and I certainly wouldn't be ignored. So that's where i'm coming from with Kaia, which is worth keeping in mind for future episodes where she steps her game more!

Charlie/Xak/Kaia
A love triangle that will be interesting to read, especially with Echidna ready to whoop up on Kaia. [YAY, ;D] I'm not sure how this one is going to play out, but like I said earlier, the rivalry between Charlie and Kaia seems like it'll be a very entertaining/edge-of-your-seat read. Or maybe I'm just crazy. :P Kaia is still coming off as incredibly selfish to me, but it's probably just because of my bias towards her. [Y'know, I'm over here proudly sporting my GO CHARLIE banner!] Charlie looks like she trusts Xak, which is a good thing. I'm trying to not be overly cynical, so I'm reaaaally hoping that Xak is going to be a smart guy. [yes, I went there!] But, like Lance said, he's sold his soul for Charlie and he seems to know when he has a good thing. And for Kaia.. You might always love your first, but just because it's there doesn't mean it's right. [btw, how unfair is it of her to put poor Xaky on the spot like that? She makes me want to hit a ho.]

PML! Hit a ho...love it! I know everyone's Team Xarlie, but just bear in mind Kaia's hurting too, as I mentioned above. This triangle is a big storyline for me to write and it was incredibly ambitious. I know it's gonna provoke mixed feelings for everyone, especially with what is coming up...

Cate & Trafford
Well, to start off with, Cate. Oh, how I love thee. I'm overly curious as to what was in that wonderful little wooden box of joys, but I'm doubting her new clique-ish and glowing personality is because she found a certain libido-upper stashed away in there. So what's up with her? Charlie should be able to recognize that something isn't right. Cate went from "yeah, okay, wait, who?" to practically bouncing hyper-ly off the walls. I loved the Little Mermaid reference, though. Sea witch. I've had to hold that one back because I actually like Ursula! Trafford, now.. I like him, still! I don't think he needs to write off his sister's feelings, though. I mean, I know he isn't completely brushing them off, I just don't think he's considering them enough to watch out? Even if we the reader don't see something wrong, that's usually leighway [sorry, I probably completely mutilated that spelling] for the writer to slip one up on us. Hopefully it's nothing.

Firstly, I think it's interesting you feedbacked these two together! What's in Cate's wooden box is revealed in 3.07 so keep your eyes peeled, it's a shocker! The Trafford/Elise thing comes to a head in the next episode, so don't worry too much! Elise will have her say, so to speak.

Elise and Constance
Since I was just speaking of Elise, I'll talk about her first. I'm hoping that her feeling something bad around Cate and Lance is nothing.. maybe just a little of something lingering behind [from Hecate for Cate, maybe the Hell Dimension/prison for Lance.. or maybe Sin has planted something in Lance? Rofl, look at me going all Twilight Zone with my guessing.] I don't think she's completely wrong. I want her hearing to be fixed, though. :[ It's just sad because I'm pretty sure no one else can understand her, so she has to use Trafford as a speaking device? Constance, on the other hand.. I like her! :] She practically has been the guardian angel of the group, and I almost had to hit Dante when he basically just brushed off her power. Let's see you go invisible and kick ass, Dante! D: Not happening, methinks.

The lingering feeling about Cate/Lance is well guessed. Might be that...might be something else! I know everyone seems desperate to fix Elise's deafness, but i'm going for a different side to it...you'll see what I mean by the time the season is up.

So pleased you like Constance, I'm at a bit of a wits end on what to do with her at the moment, but I finally decided the other week what should happen. Her power is insanely cool, which could make everything too easy for the gang!

Ea and Ursula
I don't have too much to say about them, but I did love Brogan's mocking of Sin whenever he shot her. I know he isn't going to replace Toole, so I'm not scared of that because I think you'll be able to handle the friendship in a completely new light, which is something that some writer's have a problem with. Brogan kicks ass and takes names, and he's pretty much my sexy hero. :] Ursula is basically turning out to be lovely. My feelings haven't really changed for her since the last episode, she cares deeply and protectively for her Syndicate, and those feelings have shown to stay the same even with the separation from them [meaning Xak]. She's an understanding woman.. She reminds me of my Grandma! Except pretty much more kickass. I mean, my Granny couldn't exactly lead a whole team of badass. :P Pretty close, though.

Yeah, Ea took a bit of a backseat in this episode which was a shame but he comes into his own soon! He's a very sexy hero and he compliments Xak well in battle. I think it's impossible to compare him to Toole because they're so different, so I'm not too worried about stepping on toes in that respect. I think it should work well, I just had to get that line in there about Toole as I wanted Xak to hate Sin that bit more.

Ursula is coolness, I love her. And she comes very key soon. The only thing I'm worried about with her is that people might see her as the leader rather than Xak, seeing as technically she is! However I have a method to sort that out! MWAHAHAHA!

Shelter and Cain / Sin
Shelter is still a mystery. I'm having a hard time believing she's an actual mute, though. I don't think it was stated she was, just that she hasn't found the need to speak, yet. I think we have to learn more about her past, and when we do, it'll be ground-breaking. She's important like the rest of the team, and the fact that she's quiet usually means something big, too. I don't think I'm overanalyzing it, though that is a possibility. Either way, I know she'll prove to be more than I thought. With Cain and Sin.. I actually felt bad that he died. :[ It was sad. I was actually expecting more of a sneaky death, maybe that Xak and Brogan would save him, he'd understand that they weren't the bad guys, and they'd go to save him.. only to have him die some other way at the very end. But I liked his death, too. Sin really is sadistic and I just want her dead. :[ She's psycho-crazy, for serious, ya'll. But in all seriousness, her taking it to the law is pretty messed up.. I think she'll be even more pissed when she finds out that Ursula had it covered up. Maybe? I'm not sure. I'm just waiting for her next attack..

Shelter again, in later S3 episodes becomes key, her purpose and silence is poignant. So I won't say much on that! Cain's death was sad, but I thought it was good to give him some peace after all his grief. I just thought letting him survive would be worse than dying...I know that sounds morbid but he'd been through a lot. Interesting as well that you pick up on the Ursula/Sin point!

Lance/Dante/Sofia
Are. You. Kidding. Me. :[ This is unfair. I liked Sofia's character a LOT back in the earlier times, and now I'm having to hate her. Well, not specifically, but you know. :P This'll be another interesting love triangle, and for me specifically, one that'll be right up there with Charlie & Kaia's rivalry for Xak. [Of course, I'm just nerdy like that. I'm sporting my TEAM LANCE shirt, now. :x] Lance blushes a lot, but Dante gives him a pretty good reason too. I'm just not sure how it's going to work.. Lance wasn't sure about Dante not too long ago, and now he's fighting off what could be feelings, or at least he's hiding it. Sofia actually had a place with Dante and pretty much wants it back from the way I read it. The question is, what will Dante do? Come on, Lance, step it up. D:!

Like I said; Sofia = PLANNED FROM THE BEGINNING! She was never dead and I wrote it to look that she had been killed. I know everyone's teaming Dance but come on....you didn't think it would be that easy did you?!

Black & Sephy
Not too much to say about them. I miss little ole Persephone. I do wonder where she's gotten off to.. though something tells me that it isn't good, given the situation of them avoiding the topic. And about Black.. It's always fun to learn about semi-Big Bads. I'm sure it'll turn out a more interesting read than I'm thinking! [which is in a good way!]

Ok, I won't say too much on Sephy because she's mentioned more in 3.07 and come to that matter, so is Black! It's kind of a Black-centric episode which has Lost-esque flashbacks to his past!

:] Yet again, yay for spoilertags.

Thanks so much Jared for your amazingly detailed feedback. I love ya for it!

[Lex]

Spoiler:

OMG I LOVE IT!!! I only discovered Shadow stalker like a moth ago and I've already read it all... One day i was sick and i stayed at home and did nothing apart from reading it (and eating).... I love Dante/Lance.... But I also love Sofia (though the way she survived doesn't convince me... It looks a bit forced)...
Anyway, from what you said I understood that Echidna is probably going to be in Sirens... When is this spin off coming out? You said it would come out when SS was over, but then you said that you're going to go on until season six with SS.... I can't wait that long!!!! I even hate waiting for a new episode everytime... Stop having a life and just write!!! LOL

Wow you read them all in a month, impressive and thanks so much! I love getting new readers hehe! Everyone seems to love Dance but the Sofia thing was planned from the beginning so I don't see how it was forced? You never saw Sofia's face when she died...

I'm keeping everything about Sirens in a secured location (HAHA) at the moment because I don't want to say too much on it. All i'll say is it won't run after Season Six. It will now run alongside Season 4. So i'll alternate episodes and do like SS 4.01 then Sirens 1.01 etc.

Haha I wish I could write all the time but unfortunately I can't! I have may RL commitments but comments like yours and Jared's makes all this worthwhile so thank you and I hope you'll enjoy 3.07 when it's released!

Heyas! Might be an idea to put your comments in spoiler tags for those who haven't read yet! My reply is in the spoiler tag above and thanks!

[Wiccan Rosenberg]

All right, I'm back after decking the halls and being beaten up by Frosty! [oh, the joys of setting up Christmas decorations..]

Spoiler:

This isn't too long, but just a response. First off, yeah, that was a lot of feedback, but it was pretty easy considering you've written an amazing work!

Kaia
Let me start off by saying, yeah, now that I put certain things into perspective, I don't completely dislike her. I understand that she's been through a lot. She's having to deal with seeing her husband have make-baby-time and love another woman, which I'm guessing is not the best thing to go through. I guess it's kind of ironic that Xarlie's baby turned out evil. :P But we won't go there. I do feel sympathy for Kaia, I just am biased! Can't help it. I respect her for everything's she's had to put up with, she's gained some hardiness from the twenty years she's had to endure.

And when I actually think about, if I was in a situation similar.. I'd fight, too. How lame is that. I actually think that if I just started reading this wonderful series with just this episode without too much background knowledge [like I did with Buffy, in season 4? I was a late starter, but a quick catch up] I could see myself rooting for Kaia. In a way she seems scorned, though unintentional it was. Sadly, however, I started out with Charlie and I'm sticking with the loveable character. :]

Team Lance
Yes, yes, I know! No relationship in the Buffyverse as a whole is easy. I still love Sofia, even if she is a competitor in the triangle.. Still, I stand proud with my Team shirt and I'm willing to make more. =D! Besides.. Lance is kickass. I guess it all comes down to what Dante wants. As you've said, you've had Sofia's "rebirth" planned for a while now, so that's why I don't think it was forced. When I think about it, you did have things set smoothly for a "ressurection" so to speak, as with the new replacement and Sofia's face never being shown. Lance deserves some happy, though. I didn't see Sofia locked up in demon prison. :[ [yes, lame excuse but still. team lance, whoo!]

Persephone
This is also going to be an interesting reaction from Charlie.. I mean, practically the last time Sephy was shown, she was trying to get rid of Sin.. That's not exactly the best note to leave on.

As for Black.. A Lost-esque episode feels appropriate. He hasn't had that much screentime, but we do know he's a pansy for Sin as well as being in charge of a vampire horde. [a new Master, anyone?] Learning about his rise and stuff will be interesting, I just hope our loveable characters are still in the episode somewhere. :P

[Lex]

All right, I'm back after decking the halls and being beaten up by Frosty! [oh, the joys of setting up Christmas decorations..]

Spoiler:

This isn't too long, but just a response. First off, yeah, that was a lot of feedback, but it was pretty easy considering you've written an amazing work!

Kaia
Let me start off by saying, yeah, now that I put certain things into perspective, I don't completely dislike her. I understand that she's been through a lot. She's having to deal with seeing her husband have make-baby-time and love another woman, which I'm guessing is not the best thing to go through. I guess it's kind of ironic that Xarlie's baby turned out evil. :P But we won't go there. I do feel sympathy for Kaia, I just am biased! Can't help it. I respect her for everything's she's had to put up with, she's gained some hardiness from the twenty years she's had to endure.

And when I actually think about, if I was in a situation similar.. I'd fight, too. How lame is that. I actually think that if I just started reading this wonderful series with just this episode without too much background knowledge [like I did with Buffy, in season 4? I was a late starter, but a quick catch up] I could see myself rooting for Kaia. In a way she seems scorned, though unintentional it was. Sadly, however, I started out with Charlie and I'm sticking with the loveable character. :]

Team Lance
Yes, yes, I know! No relationship in the Buffyverse as a whole is easy. I still love Sofia, even if she is a competitor in the triangle.. Still, I stand proud with my Team shirt and I'm willing to make more. =D! Besides.. Lance is kickass. I guess it all comes down to what Dante wants. As you've said, you've had Sofia's "rebirth" planned for a while now, so that's why I don't think it was forced. When I think about it, you did have things set smoothly for a "ressurection" so to speak, as with the new replacement and Sofia's face never being shown. Lance deserves some happy, though. I didn't see Sofia locked up in demon prison. :[ [yes, lame excuse but still. team lance, whoo!]

Persephone
This is also going to be an interesting reaction from Charlie.. I mean, practically the last time Sephy was shown, she was trying to get rid of Sin.. That's not exactly the best note to leave on.

As for Black.. A Lost-esque episode feels appropriate. He hasn't had that much screentime, but we do know he's a pansy for Sin as well as being in charge of a vampire horde. [a new Master, anyone?] Learning about his rise and stuff will be interesting, I just hope our loveable characters are still in the episode somewhere. :P

Answers again Jared in the spoiler tag below! Hehehe I can barely keep up with ya!

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Kaia:
Thanks so much for seeing it from her point of view! It's good to appreciate things from everyone's points of views and I don't want everyone to hate Kaia too much. She has her reasons and they're good ones. But I completely understand Xarlie fans to root for them....they were after all the beginning duo. In fact they have one of the first scenes ever!

Dance:
Aw it's so nice to have people rooting for Lance! I know what you mean, he does deserve to have some happiness, I think they all do! But my god...obstacles much

Sephy:
Totally, her reactions to Sephy's departure would be like wow. But bear in mind Ursula said she's going to explain about Sephy in 3.07...so look out for that one!

Black:
Do not fret! It's not just him. It's just there will be flashbacks. A lot of it centres on the Syndicate too.

[QueenC]

Lexabee, my great inspire...er. That didn't rhyme like I wanted it to...

Moving on to feedback.

3.06 The Kalipso Syndicate

Spoiler:

Firstly, let me just say that in 3.05, I loved all the flashbacks. And I laughed yet again at the...

SMALL DEMON: Disgusting you is. I be hating you!

Hee. I dunno why, but it's still so amusing.

Anyway, now 3.06. Firstly, I loved it. I already told you that and I always love your episodes! But the more specific feedback is below.

The Syndicate...I like. I like a lot, actually. I always wondered if the Knights of Byzantium (and Buffy and her gang, of course) were the only ones to oppose her, wherever she came from. And now I know the answer. Well, at least your answer. But I'm considering it canon.

Ursula and Cate's comment had me wanting to burst out into fun underwater mermaid songs, but I resisted, don't worry.

Speaking of Cate...I wonder what is in that box of that made our little Cathryn go all happyhappyjoyjoy. Medicine, since it was from the medical ward? Drugs? Some magic loopdeydoopdey crap? Whatever it is, I hope it's helping her more than it's harming her...Which I'm guessing, it's not.

As for the evil around Cate and Lance...I'm interested. Very interested.

Oh, the love triangle...I'm team Xarlie, all the way. I do care about Kaia's feelings (sorta kinda), but that was a long time ago, and she needs to realize that he didn't know about her when he met and fell in love with Charlie. Personally, I think Kaia and Xak need a divorce, stat. But I've got a feeling that it's not going to be that simple.

Sin. My god, her character is amazing. The whole arrow thing...Wow. Indestructable much! But there must be something that can harm her...something Xak or Charlie can do, maybe? Or a different person entirely? A new character, perhaps? A secret weapon? See, this is what I love about Shadow Stalker...it just keeps me, and presumably everyone else, guessing.

Poor Teramelli. I don't like him, but he probably didn't want to die. I seriously don't mind that he did. I found him annoying...

OH OH OH. AND.

SOFIA.
IS.
BACK.

Was I expecting it? Are you kidding me?! I can never expect something without it being completely off. I definitely didn't ever see Sofia coming back. I'm very interested...but I'm on the Dante/Lance side of things. Sorry, Sof.

Hmm...I do hope I'm not missing anything big.

I can't wait to read 3.07 and learn more about Black, plus what's in Cate's wooden box...and y'know, everything else.

[cliomiao]

Sorry i didn't know hot to put the spoiler thingy but now i do... Actually I re-read

Spoiler:

Sofia's death scene and it all makes sense... I had forgotten that the first time I read it i thought to myself "Why don't we see her dying, we only hear her screamings?"

[Alex]

I'm going to give you some feedback. So there

Spoiler:

I do love how everything has changed, with so many new characters, yet you've managed to make all of them unique and interesting. I especially like Elise and Constance. All the possibilities of new character interactions and pairings, it's very exciting

I for one am going to ship Xaia just to be different!! No, in all seriousness, it must be awful to be made into the other woman when you're actually the first woman, and everyone is just like "shut up, you no longer matter". I empathise with Kaia a great deal, it would be nice if one the other characters was a little kinder with her (I'm looking at you Echidna!). What an awful choice for Xak to make, obviously I still feel for Charlie, but even Glory would be like "I ship Xarlie 4EVAZ!" it seems, she doesn't have it so bad

Oo Sofia. Well I'm sorry babe, but you can go back to being dead if you're gonna mess with the DANCE! Poor Lance is a troubled young soul isn't he? Dante will make it all better...

I'm interested in The Sponser and what the Sephmeister's been up to. Oh and of course Cate's box of possible doom, and Elise's feeling of almost certain doom about her and Lance. I hope Cate doesn't turn evil...

Once again a joy to read, and looking forward to the next ep